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Post Grad Dreams

Originally we had written a graduation scene, but it wasn't very funny and felt out of place. And in regard to the teaching note, there were a few instances where we felt it would work (August graduation, it being a year-round school, etc).

At Feb 7, 2012 7:00:00 PM

Experiences

I have to agree with D.R., there were so many characters that it took my attention off of the story and broke my concentration. Breaking up the scene description might also help make the story a quicker/easier read.

At Feb 1, 2012 11:07:55 PM

Post Grad Dreams

Thanks Nicholas,

We're glad you liked it.

Yeah, Madison is a recurring character. It was really difficult to highlight each of the three characters and their relationship with their parents AND introduce her without it seeming awkward.

Thanks for your comment.
We'll be sure to check out your script.

At Jan 30, 2012 12:06:57 PM

Post Grad Dreams

Thanks Kate!

Glad you enjoyed it. We'll be sure to check out your script.

At Jan 24, 2012 6:44:51 PM

Quarter Life Crisis

damn, ignore my misuse of they're/their. it's late.

At Jan 20, 2012 3:50:54 AM

Quarter Life Crisis

Mr. Metellus,

I enjoyed your script.

Just one thought...

I thought it was a little strange that Darius had a Sarah Palin mask in his car. You could probably work in a joke earlier about how he throws on the mask to scare rich kids (or something like that). Without a plant, it just seemed a little off for him to have that in his car.

Also, really enjoyed the 'lost in translation' between the brit and rich. Her being british-nigerian will really sell it because they're accent is so distinct. That's definitely a throw back to Arrested and I thought it was well executed.

Solid writing and good luck (for real tho, not like that other guy)


At Jan 20, 2012 3:50:06 AM

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